Sunday, July 27, 2008

A RETRIBUTION: ANONYMOUS- PART 5

"Hey.. C'mon in, Joy"!

Joy was smiling at Rakesh. He smiled at Patil too.

"I was thinking about you", said Rakesh. "C'mon in. Meet His Patilship". Rakesh started laughing aloud.

Patil was trying hard to conceal his disappointment. He forced a smile and greeted Joy.

Joy settled down, beside Patil. Rakesh's eyes were glowing with happiness. Like a child who has been surprised, pleasantly.

"How are you, Rakesh"? Joy had a soft voice, that was very pleasant to hear.

"Oh, just fine. You know how my wife treats me".

Joy looked uncomfortable. But he said with a smile, "Don't worry. Things will get better. Shall I make some tea for all of us"?

"No. Lekha would do it once she returns home. I know, she is at.."

"I will make one for her too. She could join us, once she is back, right"? asked Joy.

Patil felt that he was in an asylum and both the men, beside him were out of their minds. Rakesh had no wife! She was dead, in that accident. He was looking nervously, at Joy.

Joy seemed to read his thoughts. He said, "Why don't you come along with me, to the kitchen? I am not very good at making tea. You might help me".

Patil nodded. And both men, left to the kitchen.

Joy was letting the water boil. He turned to Patil and said, "I am sorry about that. You know, he still thinks that his wife and daughter are alive".

"No. That is alright. What do you do"?

"I am a.. well.. lawyer".

"Oh! How do you know this man.. Rakesh"?

"We are friends. We went to the same college. Who are you, by the way"?

Patil was excited. If this man was Rakesh's friend, he must know anout Mr. Nobody too. But, he must not take a chance- not now.

"I am just a friend, too. He was just telling me about a friend of his from college, whom everyone called a "nobody". Do you know who that is"?

Joy started laughing. "That was me. I was the nobody, he was talking about".

Patil was finding it hard to contain himself. He wanted to punch this man, hard on face and drag him along to station, right now. No. He must not do anything hasty.

Patil tried to sound surprised. "Really? But why was that"?

Joy was smiling. "Oh! I just wrote a story under the name "Nessuno", for a magazine. It means nobody, in Italian. Let's go to the hall. Tea is ready".

Patil was surprised. How can this man behave so well, after murdering another. He acts so cool. But no. He won't be getting out, this time. I'll make sure of that.

He followed Joy to the living room.

Rakesh, was playing with a Barbie. He saw Joy and Patil. He showed Patil, the Barbie.

"This is Mitu. Anu and I play with her, everyday, you know. She is her favourite doll. Look, I dressed her up"!

Joy, politely said to Rakesh, "You had done very well. I am sure Anu will be pleased. Here, take your tea. Look, I made one for your wife too".

Rakesh was suddenly angry. He threw the cup of tea. He was shaking with rage.

"She is not my wife. She was never my wife. I have no wife"..

Joy said, "That is alright. She was not your wife. That is alright"..

Patil was shocked. What was happening?

Rakesh, suddenly started crying.

"You know, Joy. I am not a nobody. I am a great lawyer. You know that".

Joy was trying to console Rakesh. "Yes, I know. Just calm down. Here, have your tea". He look Patil and gave him an uncomfortable smile- which meant to say- "Sorry about that"..

Rakesh was sobbing harder. "He stole it. That Sumit.. He stole my job, my money, my wife"..

"There..There.. Just clam down"..

Patil was staring at both men, not sure if he could have his tea. And startled by Rakesh's statement!

It took a long time for Joy, to calm down Rakesh. Rakesh was now looking at Joy, oddly happy, as though he'd achieved something. He was saying, "I have showed him, what a nobody can do, but"..

Joy looked at Rakesh, sympathetically. "Oh yes, you've! I need to go. It's getting late".

Patil gained back his senses. Let go of his man. Never. But how was he going to get him. Joy had already reached the door, when he suddenly turned back and said to Rakesh-

"By the way, thank you for getting back, my lost diary, my Anamika"...


-------- THE END----------

41 comments:

*~*{Sameera}*~* said...

Wow!What an end to a great short story :)

Way to go!

Matangi Mawley said...

@sameera..

thnk u! :)

Rajesh said...

Hey...it was really really good.. take a break but I'm waiting 4 ur next...

Rajesh said...

Also lemme know as to how advertising s done in ur blog by google

Priya said...

That was a good one with nobody and a great end.

Winnie the poohi said...

amazing!!!!

Vinay said...

amazing....
wow...
excellent...
really nice story...and a brilliant end to it..!

when is ur next story starting??

Matangi Mawley said...

@rajesh...

sure.. i need 1..

thnks..

Matangi Mawley said...

@rajesh..

google adsense.. 1ce u sign up, u ll get ad s frm google..

Matangi Mawley said...

@priya..

thnk u!

Matangi Mawley said...

@winnie..

thnk u!

Matangi Mawley said...

@vinay..

think i ll take a break for sme time.. though i have a few good 1s.. i need time to decide which 1 i shld b postin next..

thnk u!

Vinay said...

hey matangi... do go through mine sometime when u r free... i am pursuing a 5 part story like u...

like somebody said...learning by reflection is noblest path to wisdom... am reflecting u actually...lolz..!:)

my inner world said...

you've been tagged by me :)

descrying the shadows said...

hmmmm... he he .. nice though i did guess it wud be rakesh ... in the second para itself ..If i am right tht is..
btw .. where have u been ..??a mail wud suffice ...

Amber Light said...

I still maintain that you should have stopped with the first story. But hey, this was a great story. I didn't think a twist was possible so late in the tale. :) keep going!

RiverSoul said...

Wow.
What an ending!
Gr8 work.
You sure are gonna write a new one are'nt you?
Please do:)
:)
Do visit my blog sometimes:)
;)

Matangi Mawley said...

@vinay..

wow! i m flattered!

tnx!

d visit u'rs soon..

Matangi Mawley said...

@my inner world..

d see tht soon.. tnx!

Matangi Mawley said...

@descrying the shadows..

:).. it jst came up.. karthik d contact u.. i ve briefed him up!

Matangi Mawley said...

@amber light..

i didnt plan it tht way.. it jst ended tht way..

thnk u!

Matangi Mawley said...

@riversoul..

will sure do! :)

thnk u!

Avaran said...

heyyyy... that was awesome!
the whole 5 parts....
i hope u become a real good story teller!

Matangi Mawley said...

@avaran..

thnk u! :)

Kartz said...

Quite the raconteur! Ll say...

Been held up lately, hence the delayed comment.

Mann said...

Hi I remember your response to my comment-- so mann, sequel is just my "practice exercise". :)

So after reading the concluding part which I was waiting quite eagerly, I must say that you have got "10 stars" for your "practice exercise"-Five stars for writing the part so perfect that it appeared complete in itself and five stars to make that short story to another interesting and perfect long story!!!!

Keep it up!!

Mann

The Rat... said...

my my my.... gripping read....


the first part as such didnt reach me much... but wat u gave was d perfect end... great that u wrote a sequel....

Kudos

The Rat... said...

blogrolling u....

Matangi Mawley said...

@kartz..

ah! thnk u!

Matangi Mawley said...

@mann..

absolutely overwhelmed! thnks! :)

Matangi Mawley said...

@rat..

thnk u so much! :)

Alok said...

:) Great ending to the plot!

Fantastic reading this made. Nice job!

RiverSoul said...

hey matangi,
Guess what?
You've been tagged.:)visit my blog and see:)

Mann said...

Hi,
"absolutely overwhelmed??" honestly I could not understand your response to my comment!!

:-)

Mann

Matangi Mawley said...

@alok..

thnk u!

Matangi Mawley said...

@riversoul..

thnk u! d do so..

Matangi Mawley said...

@mann

10 stars.. tht s wht i meant.. i mean i was really unsure abt hw my readers would like the end.. the story ended by tself.. i had no contribution.. i mean.. sometimes u start writing something hoping to arrive at sommething.. bt the words have their own plan.. n it ends up being something else.. tht s hw the part 5 was.. also tht was hw even part 1 was.. n tht was why i was unsure..

Vinay said...

wish u a happy friendship day matangi...!

Matangi Mawley said...

@vinay..

thnk u! same 2 u..

Mann said...

Thanks for elaborating!!
Well, what I wrote was my true opinion based on my understanding of your story because before commenting I re-read the whole story in one go!! So it was a true and thoughtful complement to you----.

Well I understand why you say you had no contribution but I consider this as your humility and self criticism--- of course it is good to have a healthy mind!! :-)

Keep it up!

PS: I enjoy reading your blog. so,if you don't mind, can you send me a mail whenever you write a new post? my mail ID is mann2101@yahoo.com

Matangi Mawley said...

@mann..

thnk u!

i d do tht.. thnx again!

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