Wednesday, July 9, 2008

AN UNSAID DESIRE: ANONYMOUS- PART 3

The smoke filled the room. There had never been so much smoke before. The door was opened.

"Rishi, what happened? What have you done to yourself"?

Rishi looked up. He smiled at Dev. Rishi spoke.


"You saw the TV"? Dev replies, "Yes, I did. We both know that he's one big idiot. Why did you run to him and tell him what you'd found"?

"I had no other go, Dev. I just thought, the commissioner should know it, at least. I told him not to do what he did. There is, now, no hope left".

Dev looked thoughtful The silence lingered for a few minutes, until Dev, finally, broke it-

"Rishi, what did you have in mind, originally"?

Rishi lighted a new cigerette. He began-

"From whatever I was able to gain from the reports, the man behind the murder is highly confident about his anonimity. He completely believes that he is a nobody and no one would ever know him.

This man is also sensitive about his creativity. All he wanted was that he, and no one else should claim over his words. And this was where we could've nailed him".

"How"?

"He only wanted people to know that Sumit was not Anamika. As long as the truth does not come out, the real Anamika would remain agitated, desparate. He would've let out his glimpse- again- some how or the other. But now, since he got what he had wanted- there is no hope left for us".

Dev looked at Rishi, sympathetically. They has been friends for a very long time. Dev had always admired Rishi for his intelligence and nerves. He was one honest man- struggling to survive in a leering world, filled with corruption.

Dev spoke again, "If the real Anamika was indeed the murderer, why do uou think he didn't kill Sumit before and only now, after he came out of his shell"?

Rishi knew this would come from Dev. He smiled.

"I am not very sure about that, yet. I can give you what I think, though. I think, the real Anamika, actually never knew who'd taken his works from him. And Sumit too, was initially not sure whether or not to come out of his shell. But later on, I guess, that Sumit too got convinced that Anamika, indeed, was a nobody. So, he decided to let himself known".

Dev was watching Rishi. He appeared to be desparate, yet, helpless. Rishi had never been so helpless before. Dev was concerned.

"Rishi, let's get out of here"..

Rishishresht Patil. He had never felt pain. He who had accepted the world that surrounded him- he, who had got himself used to the suffocation- who had healed his paining heart- that screamed out. Rishi, was desparate. Secretly desiring to meet a man who had made him helpless and weak. Rishi wanted to meet him- whom the world called- "Anamika".

"I am in search of a nobody", said Rishi.

(To be continued..)

34 comments:

Vinay said...

oh good...i am the 1st to comment!!!
brilliant... the thrill continues...
so well penned...
part 4 on the cards eh??? u could have made a book... bestseller on the world markets!!!
"ANAMIKA - THE ANONYMOUS" by Matangi Mawley!!
Releasing soon i hope, i want the 1st copy!

Sandeep Balan said...

wow...ur narrations really are out of this world...hav to learn a lot from you...the way you build things up...the smoothness of the whole affair...mesmerising!!

Matangi Mawley said...

@vinay..

5 parts on the whole!
book.. ? i have never thought abt it.. :)
thnk u so much!

Matangi Mawley said...

@sandeep..

thnk u!

The Lover said...

ur way of narration is really good...i liked this story...

cheers.

http://soulintoxicated.blogspot.com

Matangi Mawley said...

@the lover..

thnk u!

Rajesh said...

very good narration...waiting eagerly 4 the penultimate part...post it soon..

P.S: My blog updated :) ...i feel this is one of my best articles in recent times..i'm sure u'll njoi

authentic_since1983 said...

hi...
i'm ankur..
author of infosys story..
thanks a lot for ur comments..
i took that as an ordinary comment till i saw ur blog..
blog looks beautiful and the writings are excellent.. and a good way to attract people.. writing episode wise..

i think i'm lucky to get ur comments.. i'll have to learn a lot from u...
can i get ur mail address ?
mine is ankurktiet05@gmail.com


ankur

Priya said...

Very creative Matangi and hats of to u. Its not so easy to write a story ....

Matangi Mawley said...

@rajesh..

thnk u! ll sure visit u'rs..

Matangi Mawley said...

@authentic..

thnk u!

Matangi Mawley said...

@priya..

thnk u! :)

Amber Light said...

This part leaves no clues as to where the story is heading. All the best for the rest of the story (or is it ready already?) But why is it an unsaid desire?

Mann said...

I whole heartedly wish you to be successful in "Your self-test".

I am confident (on the basis of what I have read about your writings) that you will be successful!!

Mann

Matangi Mawley said...

@amber light..

unsaid desire of patil to meet this murderer..

Matangi Mawley said...

@mann..

thnk u!

Alok said...

I like the character constructions. This series seems to be based on these personalities rather than a definite event list. That is what kept me involved.

Awaiting further parts of the story.

Matangi Mawley said...

@alok..

hey.. thnk u! tht s a comment i ve never got so far..

thnx..

descrying the shadows said...

hmmmm.... no offence but you know even though the style and plot is gripping it somehow feels cliched ... dn u think so ..?

Matangi Mawley said...

@descrying the shadows..

i thought so too.. i ve tried to work on it on parts 4 n 5..

ray said...

Hi ,

I was reading ur blog posts and found some of them to be wow.. u write well.. Why don't you popularize it more.. ur posts on ur blog ‘LIGHTER SIDE’ took my particular attention as some of them are interesting topics of mine too;

BTW I help out some ex-IIMA guys who with another batch mate run www.rambhai.com where you can post links to your most loved blog-posts. Rambhai was the chaiwala at IIMA and it is a site where users can themselves share links to blog posts etc and other can find and vote on them. The best make it to the homepage!

This way you can reach out to rambhai readers some of whom could become your ardent fans.. who knows.. :)

Cheers,

Matangi Mawley said...

@ray..

k.. ll chk tht out..

Sandeep Balan said...

came back expecting an update...blogrolled u...come up with ur new one soon...

Matangi Mawley said...

@sandeep..

thnx..

RiverSoul said...

Nice.
Cant wait for an update
Do visit my 2 blogs too.
Silent recollections
And
Edison square

Matangi Mawley said...

@riversoul..

thnk u! ll sure do!

Abhinav Viswambharan said...

Hey, it's after a long time that I am dropping by your blog.

Though I couldn't catch up with all, I read Anonymous, the first one and its sequels. You are too good at narration. It builds up a sort of suspense and anxiety, the way you have in some good movies.

Though in your previous sequel you indirectly mentioned that ANAMIKA is a guy - "Also, the knife had been plunged with such force into Sumit, only a man who has been saturated with anger could have done it", I somehow feel that it's a gal.

Anyways, I am eagerly looking forward to the next sequel. :)

Matangi Mawley said...

@abhinav..

hey.. thnk u for the comments..

i checkd it out b4 i wrote it.. it s possible to predict a killer's sex frm the wound.. or the force applied on committing the murder.. :)

*~*{Sameera}*~* said...

Ooh!You really know how to build up the suspense,don't you? :)

Good narration!

Matangi Mawley said...

@sameera..

thnk u! :)

nefariousoutlook said...

hats off!!! excellently written...read a few of your previous posts as well...you have excellent narration...

keep posting :)

Matangi Mawley said...

@nefarious..

thnk u!

arvind1187 said...

i am bored of saying these words ..excellent ,wonderdull ,superb..
:P

Matangi Mawley said...

@arvind..

thnk u!

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